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Sami JM Kuutti's avatar

I was hanging on for dear life as the words sucked the air out of me... Until the very end I was in suspense. Hooked like a fish, then released back to reality. Well done!

Thank you!✌️

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Stefan Baciu's avatar

You basically said what I wanted to say.

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C. Lee McKenzie's avatar

Euu! So he's hauling up a surprise. Love the cliffhanger.

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Thanks!

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Writerly musings's avatar

It's a bit Earnest Hemingway - for that I do not care for it. But you have captured me otherwise.

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

I can see that. I was shooting more for Lovecraft (who’s also not a great guy). I appreciate you reading and the feedback!

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Fergus and Claude Macdowall's avatar

What a welcome catharsis after the election! TYSM.

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Thanks for the kind comment and you're welcome!!

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Robbie Ann Lewis's avatar

Heck yeah that's a good ending. Good one, Scott. I learned a few things, which I'll never use because I tried diving and discovered it ain't for me. But . . . good story, thanks!

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Thanks, Robbie! You and me both.

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Pennie R. S. Nelson's avatar

Wow spooky. Another reason why I don't care to go into the water. Great story.

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Thanks! I grew up near the ocean and I still don't much care to go in it.

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Pennie R. S. Nelson's avatar

Yeah I live near the ocean and also don't care to go in it.

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hthepoet's avatar

Love the influence of Lovecraft in this :)

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Thanks!!

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Sewit Mesfen's avatar

Now this is my kind of horror, intense and brings you into the struggle! Can't wait to read more.

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

More fiction every Friday. And I have a podcast.

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Mary J Hunt's avatar

Wow, that was intense Scott. It drew me in and left me reeling in the aftermath. What was that thing, was it real. Good job at creating suspense.

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Thabk you so much, Mary!

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Kaci Rigney's avatar

Excellent read!

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Charlotte Hamrick's avatar

Wow, you held my attention all the way. Good story!

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Thanks! You should see what I can do with 2,000 words. ;-)

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Charlotte Hamrick's avatar

Guess I’ll find out. :)

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Vinayak Ashok's avatar

That was a crisp Lazer beam of horror. Good one.

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Oh, I like that! Thanks!

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Kohlby's avatar

Good one.

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Thanks!

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Scott Roche - he/him's avatar

Thabk you Patrick! I enjoy writing Lovecraftian stuff.

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